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      The night air was already heavy from the heat of the day, and the sun was slowly approaching the horizon, it was humid out and you could feel the moisture in the air that made the breeze coming from the ocean, show no relief from the heat. It seemed like another regular night in the beachside community of Eastbrooke. However, there was something that did not feel quite right.

      The Lin Chun was working her father’s nightclub as usual, and was taking a smoke break outside the rear door of the club. She lit a cigarette and leaned back against the cool brick wall and took a deep drag off the cigarette. You could hear the music from the club thumping in the background as she stood there with her arms crossed with a perplexed look on her face.

      Just then a bouncer from the club burst out of the rear door of the club calling Lin’s name with an worried tone. He had his cell phone in his hand, as he stood in front of Lin she could see that he had bad news. Just then,

      A man on a motorcycle pulled up to where  they were standing and shut off the engine. Curiously, they watched as he lifted his right leg over the motorcycle gas tank to pivot on  the seat to face them while he took out a cigarette and lit it, took a puff and blew the smoke directly at them.

      The Lin and the bouncer looked at each other and then back at the man. He took another puff of the cigarette and said,”You  need to leave this town while you can, before you get hurt.”

       

       

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